Tell me what you think? Story/kinda a character overview?
I wrote this to be mostly like a character overview and it turned into a story a little bit. I'm probably going to change the formatting but please tell me what you think of it!
Parts of Jayne
Feet: pink toe-nails over pale
First off, you have excellent description. I know exactly what she looks like.
But that's just it - you don't want your reader to know *exactly* how your character looks. And with this description, you've set up a lot of material for Jayne

Adam would accompany Ryan to piercing conferences where he received various certifications. A social locust—for the black bug he had tattooed across his throat—Adam swiftly tied into the body mod industry. “I was almost wasting his time at that point